Badass Rhodesian Dog turns to Science

• Sep 30, 2012 - 23:10

Little bits and pieces can make a convincing whole. This bag gruff dog became enlightened and made a lot less noise! The humor is not really in this piece but the title says what I do best. I want to make this a part of my 4 or 5 inconsolable preludes. I don't know how to consolidate one separate page with another totally different file. Anyone visiting here can help me.


Comments

Since you want comments, I'll give mine, for what it's worth.

Overall, I enjoyed your piece. It was quirky but made sense. I thought that the empty spaces were interesting at first, but in the middle/end of the piece I found myself wanting more in those spaces. It would have been nice to hear some of the older motifs return in those spaces, developed and mutated in the spirit of your piece. As is, I think those rests really kill any kind of momentum, which is especially apparent given the ending you wrote. If you develop the middle of your piece more, filling those empty spaces, then I think the overall flow and sense of phrasing of the piece will improve. I think this is a nice start, but it's not done yet. Don't give up on this.

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