I'm Me

Anonymous
• Jun 7, 2011 - 00:12

This is the song I have been working on for a while. The one I am posting has the extended intro and the first verse. How is it so far? I think it is starting to become awesome, so post opinions here. As I imporve it, you will see more.

Parts: Vocal/Alto Sax, Electric Guitar, Nylon Elec Guitar, Electric Bass, Keyboard, Drums

I know that this is kinda wierd. 12 or 24 bar phrases. C,Bb,F,C,a,F,C,G,C,Bb,F,C chord progressions. Ostinato percussion. A lot of sequence and repetition. It still works, and I hope you like it.

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In reply to by Anonymous

i liked it. i wouldn't have thought of ending it the way you did, so that was a nice surprise. the piece has a nice feel to it, happy, like you feel when you go to a carnival and are surrounded by all those people and games and rides and stuff. and the smell of popcorn and cotton candy and gum and all.

for the shakey part, what about making it resemble the ending more? the transition resembles the end already, i noticed.

Anonymous
Jun 7, 2011 - 20:56

In reply to by genesis_piano

What I have is the intro, intro-1, and a verse. That's why it ends wierd. And mabye, it you have any ideas, like changing the notes or mabye extending it (I can't find the right fit for it yet in length), please tell me.

Admittedly, it reminds me of the types of songs they use in the background of those really cheesy commercials. Wish I could compose at least a decent composition. Guess I just need to practice.

So, I've created a little something that I think might bridge the gap. Honestly, I wouldn't have realized the gap if you hadn't said anything, but nevertheless, with a little bit of direction from you, I found it. To me, it sounded almost like an ascending key change, (which, of course, it wasn't) so I just identified the the highest dominant note (E) and created something that might signal an ascending key change (that doesn't exist) and voila! Hope you like it! And I will admit, that is a tricky little gap!

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I enjoyed this--the feel and spirit of it is bright and fun. I like how you gradually increased the complexity of it without losing the feel. thanks for sharing.

Anonymous
Jun 18, 2011 - 04:20

I was working on it while my dad was in the hospital. Great inspiration comes from great desperation.

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too much going on at once! as a songwriter i think it's safe for me to say you can cut out at least one of the instrumental tracks, it's not necessary. also sync the vocals more closely with your piano part. otherwise i liked the intro. keep it up!
(:

Anonymous
Jun 19, 2011 - 05:32

In reply to by choirgeek2013

Sadly, I had some restrictions on this, as in the 6 parts and the awkward harmonies between them. I was told to come up with a base ostinato to repeat all over, so the guitars and piano got it.

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