Question about tweaking my canon
So I have went pretty far in composing my canon. Here is what I did:
1)Selected Wind Quartet Template(So I have Flute, Oboe, Clarinet, and Bassoon)
2) Composed a basic bass line(it happens to be Bb, D, G, Eb, F, D, Eb, F) and then copied and pasted it into 32 measures
3) Wrote 1 melodic idea and copied and pasted that 2 measures further into another instrument and then again 2 measures further
4) Continued doing that(Main melodic part of the composition took 3 days and I hit composers block a few times. I tried to avoid 32nds as much as possible but inevitably I was going to write scale and arpeggio 32nds)
5) Added 1 measure for the ending chord
That was the major part of it. Now for the tweaks
Flute was blending in once it got to a part where it played octaves so I decided to have 3 creschendos the same length going from a starting piano dynamic to forte so that the flute would stand out and not blend in to the oboe and clarinet.
Then I obviously made the ending chord fortissimo.
The next tweak I made was to add a trill to the flute's Eb right before the chord.
Then I listened to it and my momma listened to it and she thought it was monotone and that it was beautiful but tiring without any rests. So I thought long and hard about "Where could I add rests so that the harmony isn't destroyed but the woodwind players get a chance to catch their breath?" I then settled on the section with dotted quarters having eighth rests.
Then I decided to have the bassoon change from its starting quarter note bass line to an eighth note bass line with octaves. Obviously, I went with lower octaves(so like going from the small octave to the great octave and vice versa. This posed a new problem though. Like with the flute before I made tweaks, the bassoon was blending in. So I made more dynamic tweaks having the bassoon creschendo to mezzo piano once the flute is at forte and then a sudden dynamic change to mezzo forte once the clarinet is at forte. Now I think I have tweaked enough with the bass(don't really want 16ths in the bass if I don't have to have 16ths in the bass, otherwise I might get what sounds like a bassoon solo and that's not what I want).
But I'm still afraid I might be missing something like a melody change. But if I change the melody, well for 1 thing it could go out of key, not what I want(I mean that could cause me to get a C minor chord in Bb major, while that chord is in the scale, it doesn't really fit emotion-wise into Bb major). And it could also mean the flute starts blending in again which I don't want either. To me, the less dynamic tweaks I have to make, the better.
So I was wondering, do you think it sounds monotone after all these tweaks? Here it is: