I think that this piece has some very nice sounds.
If I may make a suggestion, I feel that you have too
many different ideas which (although quite good in
themselves) do not always relate to each other.
Eg: You begin with a fine Alberti Bass and a pleasant
melody - them you have a sudden "trill" of 32nd notes,
which doesn't really go anywhere. Then there are some
sudden scale passages (some diatonic and some chromatic)
I feel that it would be more unified if you used fewer ideas
and developed them - rather than throwing in a completely
new ideas that don't relate to anything that has gone before.
I hope that this makes sense to you.
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I think that this piece has some very nice sounds.
If I may make a suggestion, I feel that you have too
many different ideas which (although quite good in
themselves) do not always relate to each other.
Eg: You begin with a fine Alberti Bass and a pleasant
melody - them you have a sudden "trill" of 32nd notes,
which doesn't really go anywhere. Then there are some
sudden scale passages (some diatonic and some chromatic)
I feel that it would be more unified if you used fewer ideas
and developed them - rather than throwing in a completely
new ideas that don't relate to anything that has gone before.
I hope that this makes sense to you.